Seb the Pokemon Trainer(Episode 17)
Author: Lucy
From: Northampton, United Kingdom
Age: 12
Date: 4th Apr 2002, 7:43 PM
Rating: 4
Comment: A few details missing here - like what was in the bag that splashed and a few bits of punctuation missing. Re-reading your story might help you pinpoint where you need comma's etc and getting someone else to read it will give you another's point of view - they can tell you what they find confusing. Editor
Title: Seb the Pokemon Trainer(Episode 17)
Seb smiled as he passed throught the gates.
'We are here. It feels like an age since we were in a city.'
Freya smiled her deep eyes in thought.
'Why is it so quiet?'
'I don't know. I tell you what let us ask my sister she is like a twin I guess a day younger then me. She lives in this house I think.?'
Freya brushed her black jeans and her matching rollneck. she had a plum purple waistcoat on and black trainers with purple trimmmings. Her hair was in two plaits and had a purple hat on the stop balancing precariously on her spikey hair.
'Oh alright.'
Freya stood by Seb as he knocked a girl of around Seb's age opened the door.
'Hello..Seb?'
'Yes um..hi.'
'Come in.'
The girl brushed her hair with her fibngers and let them in.
'Hi Cass. This is Freya, Freya um..'
'I don't use my surname much. Just Freya.'
'Hi. I am Seb's sister he makes out I am two but I am his age really. I just look young.'
'Well anyway this is my accomlice. I need to pay her a bit or her bike but I guess she is my friend.'
'Why yes you fool. Cass so do you live alone?'
'No with Mrs Dreece the shop owner. Food anyone?'
'Cool. I need to wash my hands first Seb um..he dropped my bag and I got filty as it splashed over me. I rubbed most of it off.'
Freya went to the bathroom and gasped at whta was on the sink. There were heaps of documents and one had the words Team Comet on and some infomation about Cass saying what to act like. It clicked Cass was an imposter who wanted to get Seb so she got rid of the real Cass for a while. Freya gasped as she heard the door handle open.
WHAT IS GOING ON? WHAT WILL FREYA DO? WHO IS AT THE DOOR? FIND OUT IN THE 18TH EPISODE.
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